Trelalaine Pascalle

[Trelalaine Pascalle]

Trelalaine Pascalle:: is presented by
Trelalaine, who's been roleplaying for 1 year & 8 months, and is 22 years old. Trelalaine also plays no other characters on BC.

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NStandard Data ◊

The birth certificate reads Trelalaine Shizuka Pascalle
But You Better Call Me Trelly
I've Seen the World For 23 years
As I've Been Around Since July 4
Making Myself Known As researcher
I Classify As a female human



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NMirror, Mirror ◊

Trelalaine has long blonde hair with blue-grey eyes with a bang in the middle of her forehead. Black backless shirt with black micro miniskirt one gogo-boot and one regular boot both in black. Red trenchcoat she is skinny and very flexible and agile. She is 5'10" feet tall and 130 lbs. She has four earrings in the left ear, and seven in the right ear. She even has a lip ring to make a statement. She has a scar over her left eye. She has blue streaks in her hair. She has bracelets on her wrists and she even wears ankle bracelets. She always wears everything black and red all the time. Trelalaine even has purple streaks in her hair and she always wanted to make sure that she has something showing just to make a statement. She is always in the lab depending on what she wants to research in. She doesn't wear the regular researcher clothes because she just doesn't want to wear a lab jacket. She wears anything she pleases depends on her mood Mondays be black and Tuesdays be red and etc. Her eyes are normal but not by normal means, and what she wears always shocks a lot of people. She really looks like her mother except for the eyes, and the streaks.

Trelalaine wears different kinds of boots each day of the week. Tuesdays it be one black go-go boot and one regular black boot. She wears contacts in the eyes if she is without those contacts she wears her glasses. Trelalaine is really white almost pale white. She wears a short silver dresses when she feels like it. She wears whatever she feels like. She can look normal on most days. She dyes her hair different colors depending on what the day is. Mondays purple, Tuesdays blue, Wednesday, lavender, Thursdays silver, Fridays turquoise which is very light blue, Saturdays dark purple, and Sundays black. The lipstick colors also changes on the days of her streak hair. She is really a different person who wants to streak her hair to match the color of her mood. The color in her hair depends on which mood she is in. She really wants to make it out the world and make a name for herself. Her colors of her clothes depends on her mood as well. Mostly black or red but sometimes she can wear various colors as well. Even her boots can be various other colors as well. She even has a scar in the middle of her forehead to her right eye. She even has a moon tattoo on her left shoulder blade and another tattoo in the middle of her back which is a cross with wings around it and she even has wings tattoos on her arms which she hides all the time when she works at the lab, but shows it when she is out in the public.



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N What I've Done ◊

History: Trelalaine was called the Homicidal Blonde by her adoptive parents cause she didn't care if anyone was with her or not, but she never had any friends or real family because she pass from one family to another just because she didn't wanted to changing her last name to meet their standards. She moved to Japan from the United States because her father's job transferred him to the Japan, but she was adopted by another family when the airplane got hijacked and that was back when she was 12 years old and the social services taken her into their care she got adopted by so many people that she went nuts just because of it. She always has the worst nightmares about the hijacking afterwards and wonders why she was spared.


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N Take a Look ◊

Trelalaine is cheerful, active, strongly competitive, resourceful, who feels people’s pain and feels what they feel in their hearts she reads several moves ahead at the same time. She can change from being a sweet girl to being coldhearted girl if it completes the research. She is very much feeling anyone's pain and feels what they feel in their hearts. She never wanted to be regarded as a unloved girl. She smiles a genuine smile just to hide her feelings. Her true self is hidden beneath a mask of lies she only wants to make sure she is the best. She is a kindhearted and pure girl. Trelalaine's personaltiy is a little more self-loathing. She is can be extremely selfless or recklessly suicidal. She can be sweet at times or she could be an insane person. She has a insanity side or a mad side.

She is awfully shy around the other people Trelalaine is cheerful, active, strongly competitive, resourceful, who feels people’s pain and feels what they feel in their hearts she reads several moves ahead at the same time in chess. She is very much feeling anyone's pain and feels what they feel in their hearts. She never wanted to be regarded as a lonely girl. She smiles a genuine smile she wants to make sure nothing is wrong with her life and she wants to make sure that everything is all right. She can is really strong resourceful and she is self-loathing, selfless, or reckless suicidial.

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N Just Move ◊

Can't beat me at Piano, sharpshooting, and chess
Though you may win at Tennis
I Like sweets, anime, playing video games, reading, and Kira
I Don't anything greasy, police, impurity, and criminals
Keep Away Darkness

Abilities Empathic, able to make a person feeling her own
Weapons gun
Alliance Kira
Extra She is locked inside because she's afraid to truly to open her eyes and find the ending darkness lurking outside.



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N Show and Tell ◊

Trelalaine was just walking around the town not bothering anyone because she had a piano concert to go to and stopped to watch the news about Kira and L. She was all for Kira because she knows that Kira's ideals are correct. Ishtar and her were talking for a bit about Kira and L and about her. Trelalaine finally gotten to the piano concert just before it starts beause she wanted to make sure she gets there on time. She always played the piano in the mornings and go to the labs for the graveyard shift. She wanted to make sure that her job isn't in the mornings so she asked for the graveyard shift. She likes the graveyard shifts and playing the piano in the mornings so she gets so little sleep but can pull it off. She is always in her beautiful misery she thanks her friend Ishtar for her confidence in her. All she wants is to be left alone and don't be told. She really hopes for Kira to win because she wants a peaceful world with no more crime. Her friend always argues with her about the deaths and Kira. Ishtar wants to get along with Trelalaine but can't understand her way of reasoning. Ishtar knows about Trelalaine's ability because Ishtar was warned before about Trelalaine's ability. Trelalaine is playing the piano and thining what Kira said. She has always thought what Kira and some of it made sense to her just because she is a Kira supporter. On everyday she takes what Kira said to heart and really agrees with all of it. "I hope today won't be a drag and I hope that one of these days I get to see my idol Kira in person." Trelalaine said.

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[L]

Ahem. I'm sorry, but your application is a little difficult to make sense of at the moment due to the fact that you somehow seem to have omitted pretty much all the coding of the template.

I'll ask you to please fix that so this can be read properly, and then let me know so I can look at it. ^^

[Trelalaine Pascalle]

Hey L and Light I fixed my character so is this good enough for you both?

[Amane Misa]

I believe what L meant was that we would prefer you to use the set template written by Raito when posting your character profile.

[Trelalaine Pascalle]

I did as he ask but man this is hard I haven't thought I have to go back to high school. I'm out of school and yet I still have to write two paragraphs I suck at Roleplay samples. But how's the appearance and everything else?

[Amane Misa]

What I mean is you need to keep the coding from the template and add in the information about your character, rather than deleting it.

[Trelalaine Pascalle]

Ok I fix it Misa, and Raito.

[L]

You should follow the instructions that I PMed to you. I can tell that you haven't because if you had, your application should look like everyone else's.

You know, it would have those nice colors and images on it. It's not that we're telling you to not alter a single bit of the form, but please understand that the way your application looks now, it is difficult for other people to read.

[Trelalaine Pascalle]

I did read the message so Misa got on and told me keep the coding and add a little more to this so I did.

[L]

I don't know what you did, but you definitely didn't do it the way I told you. But there, I fixed your application for you, so now it looks like it should. I didn't change any of your text, I just placed the coding around it properly.

Now it's up to you to change the info, since I was finally able to read this, and at this point I'm unable to approve the application. Your history is too much like Misa's. I'm sorry, but the whole point of making an original character is to create something different from the canons. So spice up your character's history in another way, and make her different.

Secondly, you need another paragraph in your personality, and I'm not sure about those parts involving Raito. Once again, too Misa-like. That, and Raito needs to agree with this being in your application, seeing as to how characters shouldn't normally know he's Kira. You're basically just putting your character in Misa's place, which is a no-no.

I hope I made myself clearly understood, and remember that this is nothing personal. I'm just trying to help you, as staff should do for members. So please modify this and make your character less alike to Misa, then we'll look at this again.

[Trelalaine Pascalle]

Well thanks.

[Yagami Raito]

Okay, now I have some things that need to be changed (a coding issue, was there? Yes, those can take quite a while to solve xD)

First, from what I can see in your appearance section, you have very choppy sentences and don't move into the next subject correctly. You don't need a million short sentences, just make them flow together with commas and such. As well, you just say things like "red trenchcoat...." and so on. Why not say "she wears a red trenchcoat" or something to that effect. You see, your application should be your greatest piece of writing. We look at all the sections to see how literate you are, and your grammar and punctuation and such just don't appear to be up there. Look for these things as you read over your app before submitting it to us. As a semi-literate to literate rpg, we expect all our members to have proper punctuation, grammar, and so on.

As for history, it's very short and clearly does not meet the two-paragraph requirement. It's also rushed and doesn't make much sense because it is so rushed. Expand on your ideas, and two paragraphs is no problem.

Also, for your weaknesses, I'm sure that everyone has more than one weakness aside from tennis. You should add a bit more here as it makes your character seem more real.

And as for your roleplay sample, please look it over again and take what I said about your appearance section into account. The sentences are choppy and repetitive, and as well pleased post it in the past-tense.

That's my quick review for the moment before I leave again. L and Misa can probably assist you further if I don't get here before they do. Any questions about what I said, please PM L.